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Not bad. Its actually pretty good. I like it, though this should really be in the general forum, not here, cus like you said it's notr related to the movie but otherwise pretty good.

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I like the idea of exploring the repercussions of Mario and Bowser's various battles, as well as Bowser's unrequited love for the Princess. Clearly this love-triangle will have great consequences for the Mushroom Kingdom, Koopa Kingdom, and the Mushroom World at large in the years to come. Continuing the fight through their children is certainly a fascinating concept.

However, there should be a lot more motivation involved. As they say, a story is only as good as its villain; what's Vorton's motivation for opening old wounds? Why is he doing this? His rationale for doing this is what will define the story.

That's a fair enough motivation, though I hope to see you add some subtext to the interactions between the various characters. I think Vorton could be so much more, especially if there's implication of there having been more behind Bowser.