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The Warp Zone (FanFic)

Posted: Thu Jan 27, 2011 1:26 am
by 1upmushroom
I thought it be good to post a fan fiction to start a trend, I would post it in the movie fanstuff thread but this isn't really totally related to the movie.

Its called The Warp Zone and its basically a mario fan fiction series inspired by the Twilight Zone. Now why the Twilight Zone? Well because I always find it interesting to see 2 very different things crossover and yet work in a way. I don't know, call me crazy or whatever but I think its possible to do a Mario Themed Twilight Zone series and some of you out there might agree.

But for some of you who still think that I'm crazy and that I'm possibly defying some sort of crossover and fan fiction physics, keep in mind, this is actually an experiment to see if these 2 things can work together. I fully have faith in this and will only stop if I don't feel the series is good anymore or I just don't have a lot of interesting ideas anymore. Now some of you might be saying but you also have a movie to do, AND you said your making a fan fic out of your Evovled Nightmares idea.

As far as I'm concerned my movie project will stay in the writing porcess for a long time, and Evovled Nightmare I think isn't ready to be worked on, there are too many ideas in my head about it and I have to collect these ideas and put them in order in order the for the plot to be complete.

So anyway, this is the thread The Warp one and expect the first chapter or episode ro segment, etc either tomorrow in the afternoon or the day after, I want these stories to be well written not just zoomed out for you to read.

So feel free to discuss what you think about this project and if you ever have a complaint, that's ok, or if its lacking some development or pace, that's ok, just tell me, its the only I'll learn.

Re: The Warp Zone (FanFic)

Posted: Fri Jan 28, 2011 1:37 am
by Redstar
I think it could work. Star Road + Twilight Zone = awesome. :P

Re: The Warp Zone (FanFic)

Posted: Fri Jan 28, 2011 1:54 am
by 1upmushroom
Ok I have the first part already done so I thought I'd post it. You know in case it got lost. Tell me what you think and i'll post the rest tomorrow.

Narrator: Have you ever wondered why the nature of Mushroom Kingdom and Mario Universe always seemed lighthearted and silly? Were you somtimes annoyed at its simpleness and thought it was too lighthearted yet not impressed with the grittier more adult takes on the universe? Well then, this might interest you.

This show is merely a collection of stories of the super natural and yet fitting well into the Mario Universe. It comes across with an adult feel yet it never resorts to excessive gore, racism, guns, offensive material, swear words, or any sexual material. Though there are fist fights, and suspensful moments.

So sit back, grab some popcorn, and read on to see the latest episode.


Episode 1: The mind levels.

Its 4:00 Pm and the celebration of the fall of Bowser began. Wine bottels were opened up with the corks flying everywhere, cheery msic and fireworks filled the air. And the Mario Bros were celebrating hard core, though for the sake of young people, I won't explain HOW hard core they were.

So there Mario and Luigi were, partying, chatting and doing other stuff. But yet, the party wasn't on their minds. The Bros were having different thoughts in their head. Mario thought of Peach, for he never admitted it, but Mario felt a certain bond with Peach all this time at the mushroom kingdom. nd often thought about going out with her.

And occasionally, he thought further than that and images of Peach as hs wife swept his mind. Luigi on the other hand thought of different things. He never admitted it, but Luigi wwas insanely jealous of Mario. Mario got all the fame, and his name was everywhere, but Luigi was rarely heard of. For once, Luigi wanted to have a taste of the action, where everyone knew of Luigi more than Mario.

So anyway, Mario and Luigi were just having the time of their lives and didn't go to bed until 4:00 AM, ironic in a sense. Mario and Luigi then woke up at 10:00 Am in different rooms of course and had an extremely boring day.

Mario then went and got the mail. The only thing there was an invitation to Paradise Caverns. A place where people said to be enchanted by its amazing scenery. Mario then looked at the image on the front. It looked interesting enough.

Mario: Hey Luigi.

Luigi: Yeah?

Mario: Have you heard of this Paradise Caverns?

Luigi: Eh, I remember someone saying they were going there but that's pretty much it.

Mario: You think it be interesting to see?

Luigi: I don't know. A little bit I guess.

Mario: Hmm.

Mario then picked up his cellphone and called Peach.

Mario: Hey Peach, there's this place called Paradise Caverns, I'm thinking of going there. Wanna come with? Ok, I'll be right there to pick you up.

Mario then hung up with a little blushy grin. Mario then looked at Luigi.

Mario: So you coming with?

Luigi: Eh, I got nothing else to do so sure why not?

Mario then got up and started getting ready while Luigi just cleaned up his clothes. Mario then came back with some glasses in his suspender straps and some extra money. Mario and Luigi, then went outside the house and got in the car.

After a couple minutes they got Peach, some food and they were off to the caverns. It took at least 2 hours to get there but they finally did. The carverns themselves were very beautiful and almost mazelike. As soon as Mario, Luigi, and Peach got out of the car. They were greeted by an old man.

Mr. Copperson: Hello I'm Mr. Coppperson, the owner of everything you see here.

Mario: Hi I'm Mario-

Mr. Copperson: Of course.

Mr. Copperson then shook Mario's hand.

Luigi: and I'm Luigi (raising out his hand).

Mr. Copperson: Oh, uh, who?

Luigi then retracts his hands.

Luigi: Yeah, ok, ok.

Mr. Copperson: And uh you are-

Peach: Peach sir.

Mr. Copperson: Ah yes. Well, if you'll follow me I'd like to give you a little tour of the insides of the caverns.

Mario then looked at Luigi who just shrugged with a look that said "Fine with me". Mario then looked at Peach.

Peach: Eh, I'll stay here for a while.

Mr. Copperson: Suit yourself. Now gentlemen follow me please.

Mr. Copperson wnet inside the caverns and the Bros followed.

Mr. Copperson: As you see, the carverns are all made in a curvy fashion.

But as they kept going Mario and Luigi started to ingore his banter and look at the scenery. Luigi then heard a little voice. It came from the left. Luigi tried to ignore it but couldn't resist and went to see what the voice was.

Mario noticed Luigi's absense and tapped Mr. Copperson on the shoulder. Mr. Copperson turned around.

Mr. Copperson: Yes?

Mario: Uh, where's Luigi?

Mr. Copperson: Oh I wouldn't worry about it, this cavern maze is only so long actually your bound to meet up sometime.

Mr. Copperson then continued the tour as Mario followed. Meanwhile Luigi was still walking until he began to hear more sounds, after a couple more minutes, Luigi finally saw what was making the noise. It was a town! Full of people, no one seemed to notice Luigi until he walked up to someone.

Luigi: Hi.

The person then turned to Luigi and then almost fell down. The other people were also shocked to see Luigi and stopped what they were doing. Luigi then waved his hand and the crowd just applauded. This was entirely shocking to Luigi but i a way, he also felt great about it.

The people then began to confront him, and ask questions and such. Never before had this happened to Luigi. Luigi, not really knowing what to say looks in his pocket hoping to have something that'll please them.

He then finds a fire flower. This gives Luigi an idea, as he eats the flower and then flicks his fingers, a little flame of fire erupted. The people then gasped and slowly crept away a bit. But Luigi then flicked his fingers again and the flame disappeared.

Then one person nearly lunged on him and bowed down.

Man #1: Oh please don't hurt us with that flame.

Luigi: Its ok, I won't do it.

Man #1: No, I see it in your eyes. Please, we'll do anything you want.

Luigi slightly taken aback by this, ponders a bit.

Luig: Well, I wouldn't mind, say a little statue of some sort?

Man #1: Oh, we can do that. We really can watch us!

The person then ran to others and chatted with them, Luigi then stepped back a bit and watched as they crafted a life size statue of himself. It was very detailed and beautiful looking. But Lu igi, while loving the statue started to ponder some more.

Luigi: Its good, but uh, its a bit short. I was thinking maybe 10 ft higher?

Man #1: Oh yes! Sorry my lord.

"My lord", that sounded pretty nice to Luigi as he looked at the other people.

Luigi: So uh, what houses do you have open?

Luigi then got shown many beautiful houses and picked one.

Luigi: But uh, its missing something, how bout I stick an L on that house. Is that ok?

Man #2: Of course not! Let us!

Luigi: Ok.

Luigi then spawned an ominus grin as he went inside his new house. Meanwhile Mario was still following Mr. Copperson when they stopped at a big area to sit down.

Mr. Copperson: This is the middle area where guests usually sit down. Now I'll be back to continue the tour but first I must check some things.

Mr. Copperson then left as Mario just sat there alone. However now that Mario looked at it, te caverns while beautiful looked as if they had something to hide beneath its amazing scenery.


let me know what you think guys. Like I said, its not done yet, but I thought you should at least get like a preview of it.

Re: The Warp Zone (FanFic)

Posted: Fri Jan 28, 2011 11:45 pm
by Redstar
Your dialogue could use some work but the overall narrative progresses fairly well.