Official FAN-SCREENPLAY thread! (COMPLETED)

[Serum]

Things are getting exciting now, in this brand new installment of the outline, for your reading pleasure...

Jump cut to outside a series of nicely restored, Brooklyn tenements against the Manhattan skyline, the Twin Towers' lights are starting to shine in the twilight, now. Then the sounds of teacups clinking inside can be heard. “So Sister Rosalina,” we hear Luigi's voice start. Now we cut to inside the apartment, which is fashioned like a nun's home, we're panning across pictures of friends and family as we hear Luigi continue his dialogue: “In the Good Book, err... the Bible, does it say anything about dinosaurs?” Now we see Luigi sitting on the couch with a nun in her mid-forties. She looks like a very kindly person, motherly, if you will. She and Luigi are drinking cups of hot tea. “Well, yes and no,” Sister Rosalina says in a 'matter of fact' tone. “The first thing you must know about the Bible is that a lot of books, or chapters of the Bible didn't make it into the final publishing you and I read today. But many of these missing chapters include references to strange dragon-like creatures unlike anything many people have ever seen. So in a roundabout way, there are dinosaurs in the Bible, but they're never referred to by name.” She concludes. Luigi is holding his teacup over a tiny plate, pinky-out. He nods, thoughtfully, not entirely understanding, but politely, nevertheless. She chuckles and says “It's all very confusing, I know.” Luigi smiles and laughs a little. There's a half-a-beat of a pause, and Luigi interjects: “Do you ever watch 'The Miraculous World?'” She smiles and nods, “That's the one hosted by Peter Graves, right?” Luigi nods and points affirmatively. “Yeah, that's the one! Did you see it last night, with the guy who claimed he was in another dimension or a world that's crossed over or something?” Sister Rosalina nods, sipping her tea, Luigi continues: “Yeah, I believe a lot of the stuff I see on TV, but that one was a little far-fetched, don't ya think?” Putting her tea down, Sister Rosalina gently shakes her head. “I think anything's possible, Luigi,” a short pause, she finishes with: “You just gotta believe.” The camera pans in on Luigi who takes this in, nodding very thoughtfully. Daisy comes out of a door behind them, dressed in a pretty yellow and orange sun-dress and high-heel sandals, the rock is around her exposed neck. Luigi and Sister Rosalina turn around, Luigi smiles. “You look lovely, Daisy!” He says, but Sister Rosalina just turns back and slumps, rolling her eyes. “You look like a tramp...” Luigi chuckles nervously, Daisy rolls her eyes. “Oh, Aunt Rosa...” Rosalina turns on the TV, 'Jeopardy' is on, she changes the channel to 'Wheel of Fortune.' She turns down the volume as Luigi gets up off the couch, and says: “When do you think you'll be back, Daze? Should I wait up, or...?” Daisy shakes her head and says “No, we're gonna be out at the dig, and then probably go with Mario and Pauline to dinner, don't wait up for me, if you wanna go to sleep...” She trails off as Sister Rosaline waves away the notion. “Alright, well, have a good time, you two.” Daisy reaches over and kisses Rosalina on the cheek and Luigi goes and opens the door to the apartment hall for Daisy. “Bye Sister Rosalina, nice talkin' to ya, as always.” She chuckles softly as she lights a cigarette and waves. “Take care of my Daisy now, treat her like a princess.” She says, Luigi nods and exits the apartment, closing the door behind him. She laughs a little shaking her head with a 'those kids and their music' look on her face. Cut to outside the apartment building, where a cab rolls up in front of the illuminated apartment building, Luigi and Daisy get in and roll away. There's a five or so second pause, where just traffic rolls by, when a battered cab from the 1970s rolls up. Iggy, Morton, Spike and Wendy-O hop out, Spike was driving. Spike is silent as Iggy gives the orders. “Alright, here's the plan. I'm gonna go in, see if I can't lure her out here peacefully.” They all nod, including spike, who's rolling a cigarillo, which he lights and takes a deep, long drag off of. Iggy continues: “If I'm not out in fifteen minutes, or if you hear yelling, come in, but for the love of God, don't show any sort of brute force! The last thing we want here is a frigging hostage situation. If you need to come in, I'll bark further orders, understood?” They all nod, affirmatively. “Alright, good, I'm going in now, wait. What time is it?” He asks. Wendy-O taps the side of her glasses. “It's seven-forty-five.” To which Iggy nods. He goes inside, disappearing into the apartment lobby. They all wait outside, Morton taps his foot with his arms crossed. “So what do you guys wanna do after this? I was thinking we'd all go to Applebees or something.” Iggy rushes out the door, saying: “World Trade Center dig! We're going to the dig!”

[Serum]

I'm on a roll tonight, here's yet another page...

Now we cut to Mario, Scapelli, the two goons, all cramped in the back of the car. The song 'Night Fever' by The Bee Gees is playing on the radio, Scapelli is feeling the need to sing along, as he (poorly) sings the lyrics: “On the waves of the air, there is dancing out there, if there's something we can share, we can steal it! Come on, everybody!” The two goons join in on the 'Sweet City Woman' choral part of the song, they're disturbingly good. Mario has his head in his hand against the window, muttering angry curse-words under his breath. “You know it's bad enough when you guys have to sing it, it's worse when you have to sing it with passion.” Mario says, grumpy and tiredly. The car continues to slug it's way across the Brooklyn Bridge, which is backed up with traffic. Mario groans out in frustration at the song and the three idiots he's stuck with, who are all singing along to it. Slam cut to the base of the World Trade Center, which Luigi and Daisy walk towards, hand in hand, past a shady looking character on a bench, fumbling with a walkie-talkie, which keeps tuning into Rush Limbaugh. That's rushed away when the romantic song, 'I Would Stop The World,' as performed by Charles & Eddie begins to play to a montage of Luigi and Daisy walking through the exhibits in the tower lobby, inter-cut with scenes of Mario, sitting in the car, grumpily and four of the seven Kooplings packed into the old cab, which is all inter-cut with scenes of city skyline on this beautiful summers' evening sunset. It's a little like a music video for the duration of the song, then we come easing back into reality, when Luigi and Daisy get in an elevator, she presses the 'B-6' button, out of the hundred-and-something buttons available. “When the bomb went off in February,” Daisy begins, “It opened up a hole to a cave beneath the foundations of the towers.” Luigi is listening, not just nodding his head politely, but really, really listening, like a good boyfriend or girlfriend should. Daisy continues: “The cave was lined with dinosaur bones, and we've been drilling further and further ever since the smoke cleared and we've been finding more and more new species everyday.” The elevator dings, and the doors open to the dig, which is guarded by a lone security officer, who's thumbing through a 'Hustler.' He looks up, Daisy and Luigi each pull out their own separate pass-cards and the guard looks at them, briefly, then waves them in, going back to his 'Hustler.' Daisy leads Luigi to the edge of a massive hole, from where the bomb went off, looking down into an even deeper hole that leads to the dig itself. “Wow, those terrorists really tore this building's basement a new one.” He says carelessly, Daisy nods, absently, “Thank God they reinforced the building with concrete; it's like Mister Fielding said, it'd take one mighty blast to bring these towers down, now...” They look around, dreamily, then she leads him over to a long series of folding-tables which have all sorts of dinosaur bones on them, ready to be inspected by students. Luigi goes to reach for a skull-like bone, when an unknown voice yells “Don't touch that!” He spins around, to see James, climbing up one of the ladders from out of the dig. “Are you authorized to be down here, sir?” James inquires, steamed. Luigi begins to speak, when Daisy steps in: “He's with me, James, what the heck are you doing down here so late, anyway?” She says, a little pissed off at him. “Oh, Daisy. I didn't recognize you...you look so, clean.” She gives him the finger. “Alright, alright, I'm sorry.” James starts, continuing with: “Actually I've been down here since we found that new rock formation late this morning,” he says, and pulls a few new crystals out of his shirt pocket, they're glowing, a very faint, almost nonexistent glow, but they are glowing. “Wow, that's...” Daisy starts, James finishes the sentence: “Amazing, I know.” He yawns, “Well, I gotta get these to the lab, it's gonna be a long night.” He walks off, grabbing his bags and a few items, then leaves, heading toward the elevator. Luigi looks a little puzzled, “What a Melvin.” Luigi says, “But I guess he knows his stuff.” Daisy nods. There's a pause, then Luigi's eyes light up. “Oh yeah, that reminds me!” Says Luigi, starting to dig into his pockets, he pulls out the necklace-case from before. “This is for you.” Daisy smiles as he hands it to her, “Aw, Luigi...” She starts, but Luigi waves away the notion, “No no, it's okay, open it.” She opens it, looking at the necklace, smiling widely at the note. “Luigi it's wonderful!” She hugs him and kisses him on the mouth. “Nothing too good for a princess.” He says, the two of them still in each others arms. Cut to the shady guy outside, he's greeted by the four other Kooplings, he asks: “Where have you been?!”

[Serum]

Here's where the action starts getting really tight, enjoy!

Iggy sighs, “You gotta love rush hour in Manhattan,” to which the fifth Koopling, Ludwig-Von, responds with a question: “Which way'd you come?” Iggy shakes his head. “It's not important. The girl is here.” Ludwig-Von puts his hands out in a 'duh' gesture. “Yeah, I figured. I'm here, aren't I?” Ludwig has a very sardonic and unforgiving personality, apparently. They all turn there heads when a Limo with its speakers playing “Walk The Dinosaur” at full blast, pulls up. Mario, Scapelli and Scapelli's goons get out. Mario shakes himself, “Ugh, thank you, thank you for showing me the bloody mouth of Hell.” He starts towards the towers, Scapelli and the goons follow quickly, Scapelli is yelling “Hey, Mario, wait up!” The Kooplings follow, and they all disappear into the lobby of the tower with the dig. Ludwig shakes his head, chuckling. “Some people will do anything for publicity.” Iggy smacks him upside the head. “Come on! We have to get in there!” They all run inside the tower lobby. Cut to inside, where Mario and company are about to get in the elevator to go down to the dig. The Kooplings all are running, yelling “WAIT! HOLD THE ELEVATOR!” And things akin to that. Mario holds the elevator for them, everybody gets in, Mario, Scapelli, the two goons and the five Kooplings are all cramped in the elevator. “So...” Mario starts, “You guys students for the archeology-thing?” Iggy's eyes dart around, nervously. “Um...sure, why not.” He says, as nonchalantly as possible. The elevator dings and they all arrive in the dig. The guard looks up, he's still thumbing through that Hustler, he stands up. “I'm gonna need to see some...” Scapelli pulls out a gun and shoves it in the guard's face, then he hands him a small stack of money. “Don't tell the other guards what you just saw, we're just passing through.” Scapelli says in a half-nice half-threatening tone. The Kooplings follow Mario and company, the guard looks at them, Wendy-O just says: “Uh, we're with them.” And they press on. Luigi and Daisy are looking at the dinosaur bones, when Mario walks up to them. “Luigi, what the hell are you doing here?” He asks, abruptly, Luigi responds: “Looking at dinosaurs, why, what are you doing here?” Mario responds rapid-fire, “Looking for Pauline... Hi Daisy.” Daisy smiles, “Hi Mario.” Scapelli's looking around, frantically. “Pauline! Pauline? You down here?” He's yelling, the goons are helping him look. Suddenly, Iggy, Spike, Morton, Ludwig-Von and Wendy-O all run up to Daisy, “Is your name Daisy Toadstool?” Iggy asks, abruptly, Daisy nods. “Yeah, why, what's this all about?” Iggy and Spike exchange glances, then grab her, she screams, Luigi goes to attack, but Mario's already swung a punch at Spike, who takes it in the face, but doesn't seem to notice, or care for that matter. Suddenly, a wrench comes flying out of nowhere, hitting Mario on the head, knocking him out! The camera pans over to the PASCAL BOYS! Doug, Farley and Vinnie. Iggy screams, frustrated. “Who are you people? Seriously, who moved the rock?!” But as he says this, one of the Scapelli goons flies into Iggy's side, releasing Daisy from his grip, Spike lets go and takes him on, the other goon runs over to aid his partner, when the Pascal Boys run at Luigi! “We're gonna teach you the meaning of law, boy!” Doug says, tapping a wrench in his hand. Wendy-O runs up from behind him and kicks him square in the balls, he never sees it coming as he falls to the ground, passing out in pain. Mario starts to come to, as everybody starts brawling. Luigi takes on Vinnie, Daisy takes on Farley, Wendy-O helps. “What's going on?!” Daisy yells, Luigi lands a right hook square in Vinnie's face, breaking his jaw, Vinnie retreats in pain, Farley passes out after Wendy-O kicks him in the head while he's down, then she grabs Daisy. “Guys, let's go! We got her!” Spike roars as he throws both goons down at once, he nods at Wendy, then grabs Daisy's legs, but Mario jumps up, abruptly, side-swipe-kicking Spike off his feet. The two goons get up and try to take on Spike again, who's now walking over to Iggy, who's in a fistfight with Scapelli. “Where's Pauline? You have something to do with this!” He yells, angrily. “Scapelli!” Mario yells. “You've got a gun, right?” Scapelli's eyes light up like Christmas, he whips out the pistol and fires a warning shot into the air, then he says, “Oh...shit! I think that was my last bullet!” He tries pulling the trigger again, nothing. Ludwig and Morton tag-team tackle him and he falls unconscious. Daisy is still being held by Wendy, who Luigi is trying to get to let go. “Come on, come on!” But Spike grabs Daisy's legs and they hop down into the pit! The other Kooplings follow, hopping down like Billy goats. The Marios watch, in disbelief.

[Serum]

Well, I think I'm gonna take a short break for writing tonight, that's five pages I just churned out...enjoy!

Everybody else, the Pascal Boys, Scapelli, and his two goons are knocked out, writhing on the floor in pain. The security guard has run off. “We gotta go down there!” Luigi says, frightened. “When you're right, you're right...let's go.” Mario agrees, and they slide down the ladder, to the bottom of the pit. We can hear Daisy screaming from somewhere in the distance. There are four directions that four different tunnels go to. Luigi starts to go right, but Mario grabs him. “No, no, that's the echo...this way!” They run down a long tunnel, and come to a huge chamber made of the crystal that makes Daisy's rock-necklace. The room is a dead end. Luigi walks up to the end of the room, the crystal-cave wall is fluid, water-like, he reaches out to touch it, when Daisy's head and neck comes out, through the semi-solid rock! “Luigi!” She screams, her necklace dangling, he tries to reach in for her, but something on the other side pulls her in, Luigi grabs her by the necklace, but it snaps, he falls over backwards, the rock in his hand, as she's pulled into the other side. Luigi is shaking badly, Mario walks to the wall, curiously, he sticks his arm in it, moving it around. “Weird...come on, let's go!” But Luigi is a little shocked at the moment, Mario gets him up on his feet. “Luigi, listen to me. We have to go after her, and you know it.” Luigi snaps out of his little fear-coma and nods. Together they walk into the wall, disappearing inside. Cut to the other side, which is an even bigger chamber, but this one is man-made, it's like a shrine, of marble, a huge spherical crystal floats in the middle of the room, it has a few chipped pieces missing from it, one big one about the size of Daisy's rock. Mario and Luigi come through a 'doorway' built in the room. There is another just like it across the room. “Where'd they go?” Luigi asks, Mario looks at the floating crystal in wonder. “Oh my God...” Then Luigi sees the other 'door' at the far end of the shrine. “There!” He yells, and runs over to it. He feels it, it too is fluid, passable. Mario looks over and nods. “Right, let's go!” They go through that 'door,' and emerge in a long, man-made tunnel, at the end of the tunnel they come to a lift, which is all the way at the top. “Where are we?” Mario asks. “It must be the South Tower...” Luigi responds, pressing the button for the lift. “Then what was with the gooey wall and the big floating ball?” Mario asks. “Look, Mario, I don't know. It's probably all Industrial Light and Magic, for tourists or something.” Mario makes a face at this, “For an archaeological dig?” The lift comes down, they get on, and go up, at the top is a similar looking basement, with a similar hole, they come to the top and run out. A security guard, dressed in a peculiar, spiky uniform, sits reading a magazine called 'DINO-BABES.' Mario and Luigi run up to him. “Hey, hey!” He looks up. “Did you bring me some clean coffee this time, Ware?” The guard says to Mario, then looks at his tacky leisure suit. “What the hell are you wearing?” Mario just shakes his head and they run to the elevator and get in. “You better bring me something good, next time!” The guard yells, going back to his magazine. Cut to the lobby of the Booster Plaza South Tower, which is oddly deserted, littered with garbage. Mario and Luigi run out of the tower and when they come outside they're greeted with a shock... Manhattan has drastically changed, for the worse, apparently. It's on the edge of a seemingly endless desert, the sun is rising here, not setting, and there is crime and chaos in the streets, everywhere. Strange people dressed in odd, pseudo-futuristic clothes walk the streets. Some wear turbans, others have lizard-like scales on parts of their faces. Advertisements for odd businesses like 'HAMMER BROS TATTOOS,' or 'THWOMP BOOTS' are all around. Mario screams in confused frustration. “Where the hell are we?!” Luigi steps forward, looking around. “I, I don't know...” Then Mario turns around and looks up. “Holy shit, Luigi, look!” Mario says, Luigi spins around, to look up and see a nightmarish rendition of the World Trade Center, the tower opposite of them still under construction, or maybe renovation, it's hard to tell from where they're standing. “Mario...what's going on?” Luigi asks, frightened. “I told you already, I DON'T KNOW!” Mario screams. A large policewoman walks up to them, this is BERTHA. “Is there trouble here, boys?” She asks, politely. “Yeah, where are we?” He asks, she chuckles hoarsely. “You're at the Booster Plaza...duh.” She says, walking away. Mario runs over to a pay-phone, dials 911. “We need help, we're trapped in a dangerous and strange place!” He yells, the operator responds: “Uh-huh, aren't we all. Stop tying up this line.” And hangs up.

[Prime Evil]

Hmm...your Dino-Babes magazine sounds like a fairly-unimportant Chekhov's Gun to me.

Also, I like your use of "Walk the Dinosaur" as the Koopas' leitmotif, if that's your purpose.

EDIT: Consider this: Queen Latifah as Bertha.

[Serum]

Hmm...your Dino-Babes magazine sounds like a fairly-unimportant Chekhov's Gun to me.

Also, I like your use of "Walk the Dinosaur" as the Koopas' leitmotif, if that's your purpose.

EDIT: Consider this: Queen Latifah as Bertha.

Remember, it's just an outline, a rough one at that-- some of this will change in the final script. Also, yeah, Queen Latifah would make a good Bertha.

Also, the guard referencing to Mario as 'Ware,' is a very important Chekhov's Gun, the magazine itself isn't important.

[Prime Evil]

Also, the guard referencing to Mario as 'Ware,' is a very important Chekhov's Gun, the magazine itself isn't important.

Uhhh....not sure I follow. I'm a bit slow on the uptake today. Is it something to do with Wario (e.g. WarioWare)?

[Phlibbit]

I think it's an early reference that there is a "Wario" character in this universe...the gate attendant mistakes Mario for Wario, because he's his parallel dimension counterpart.

[Serum]

I think it's an early reference that there is a "Wario" character in this universe...the gate attendant mistakes Mario for Wario, because he's his parallel dimension counterpart.

Exactly, that's exactly what I was trying to say. You hit the nail on the proverbial head.

[Prime Evil]

I think it's an early reference that there is a "Wario" character in this universe...the gate attendant mistakes Mario for Wario, because he's his parallel dimension counterpart.

Musta had his head stuck a little too far in that "Dino Babes" catalog. Speaking of which, the Chekhov's Gun I mentioned was the magazine getting left behind in our world...and someone discovering that there is indeed a market for such a thing.

I guess I owe you a new monitor for that one, huh, Merritt?

[Serum]

I think it's an early reference that there is a "Wario" character in this universe...the gate attendant mistakes Mario for Wario, because he's his parallel dimension counterpart.

Musta had his head stuck a little too far in that "Dino Babes" catalog. Speaking of which, the Chekhov's Gun I mentioned was the magazine getting left behind in our world...and someone discovering that there is indeed a market for such a thing.

I guess I owe you a new monitor for that one, huh, Merritt?

I'm sorry, a new monitor? Why would I need a new monitor?

[Prime Evil]

I visualized you reading that and spitting your coffee all over the monitor.

[Serum]

I visualized you reading that and spitting your coffee all over the monitor.

I'm not sure I follow you.

[Serum]

Right, anyway here's another page of the outline... enjoy!

Now we cut to a view overlooking the streets of this nightmarish Manhattan, the apocalyptic skyline shimmers in the twilight from the streets of Downtown Mushroom Kingdom and beyond this reality's rendition of the Empire State Building. “Look at this place-- pathetic! It gets worse everyday...” A voice says, we then see the face connected to the voice, it's the man from the beginning, Koopa. He's standing with his hands behind his back, looking out the window of his office. A woman sits on a leather armchair in the corner, by a fireplace, she's filing her nails, she's dressed in an all leather, skin-tight black dress, complete with thigh-high leather high-heel boots. She is Lena Valentina. She blows her fingers, to get the nail-dust off of them. “Yes, Koop, you give this speech everyday.” He spins around, and stiffly walks to a desk with several computer readouts on it, like the bad guy's desk in the movie 'TRON.' He looks it over, briefly, then scoffs and continues: “You think I don't know that?” He says, softly. “There isn't a day that goes by I don't wish King Bowser had just listened to me; if we had just merged the dimensions then, we wouldn't be going through all this shit-- but the shit's hit the fan, now. Now we have no choice. If the Kooplings don't find the right girl in the next twenty-four hours, I'm going to proceed with...” He pauses and looks over his computer desk again, he uses a touch-screen to pull up a folder on screen, it has the word 'BOO,' on it. “Project BOO.” He finishes, he's struggling not to choke up in front of his concubine. She walks over to him and puts a hand on his shoulder and sighs. “It's a messy plan, Koop. You can't wipe out an entire species of cognoscente animals without somewhat upsetting the very ecosystem you want to build from, besides, they have something we don't.” Koopa growls angrily. “What? What do they have?” He yells. She calmly replies: “A whole arsenal of nuclear weapons that will destroy their entire planet, all the lush and green resources you want, with the press of a single button.” Koopa sits down in his giant leather recliner and puts his head in his hand. He looks as though he hasn't slept in weeks. “I pray to God they find the girl, and the rock, soon.” Koopa says, painfully. He lights a cigarette and takes a deep drag on it. “Even our tobacco sucks.” He says angrily. Cut to a strange, white laboratory. We see from the top down, a conveyor belt, it whirs to life, and is coming out of a large, cat-scan like machine. Daisy comes out of it, she's out cold, lying on her back. Iggy and Spike look on, nervously, the other Kooplings sit outside the room, looking in through a window. “Well?” Iggy asks, he's sweating, his tongue swirls out of his mouth, it's long, thin, like a reptile's; he wipes the sweat away with his tongue, it retreats back into his mouth. A man at a computer types in code, then the screen turns green, making a positive sounding 'BLIP,' noise. The man, Simon, turns around in his chair and smiles. “Boys, you've found her.” Simon says, in a congratulatory tone. Iggy and Spike both sigh a huge sigh of relief. “Thank God, inform King Koopa.” Iggy says. Iggy walks out of the room and yells “WE GOT HER!” And the Kooplings all cheer. Then cut to Mario and Luigi, who are walking through the Mushroom Kingdom, it's a festering pot of crime and violence. “Mario, something's wrong, I haven't been to Manhattan in a couple of weeks, but... this can't be the city!” Luigi says. “Maybe we got knocked unconscious for a hundred years and woke up in the Manhattan of the future.” Mario says. An old lady walks past them. “Excuse, me, lady, lady!” Luigi asks her, she rolls her eyes and spins around: “What?” She asks, impatiently. “Can you tell me where we are?” She starts to walk away, when she notices the rock that belongs to Daisy, hanging around Luigi's neck. “Yeah, you're in...” She grabs the rock, ripping it off Luigi and starts running. “Hey, hey! That's not even ours!” Luigi yells. She's running and laughing, when Bertha, the cop from before steps out in front of her, puts her hand out and the old lady runs into it, face first, not looking where she's going. Big Bertha grabs the rock and walks over to the Marios, away from the thieving old lady, who's out cold. She starts to hand it back to them when she gets zapped from behind and falls to her knees, it's the old lady! She's got a stun-gun. She grabs the rock. They all exchange glances. “Can you just give us the rock back, lady?” Luigi asks. The old lady clicks her heels together, she's wearing THWOMP-stompers, big boots that let you jump really high. The Marios are too distracted looking and listening to the boots power up. The old lady chuckles and says “Come and get it, asshole.” And jumps off into the distance, out of sight.

[Serum]

Another page written, enjoy!

Mario and Luigi help Big Bertha up, she brushes herself off. “Thanks, guys. Glad to see there are still good Samaritans out there.” She says. “No problem, but we need some help...” Mario starts, Luigi nods. Big Bertha asks “What's up?” Mario looks around, confused. “Where are we?” He asks. Cut back to Koopa, sitting in his chair. A buzzer goes off, he presses a button on his desk, the doors to the office open, Iggy and Spike walk in, smiling. “If you don't have good news, don't talk to me.” Koopa says, irate. Iggy doesn't say anything and puts a piece of paper down on the desk in front of Koopa, still smiling. Koopa looks it over, his mouth goes slack-jaw and his cigarette falls out. “You found her! You actually found her!” He says, excitedly, then he shakes each of their hands. “Good, good! Now...where's the rock?” Iggy feels his shirt pockets for it, “I had it... the brothers, the brothers from the other side have the rock!” Koopa smacks his forehead. “Did they follow you through? Are they here in Sarasaland?” Iggy nods, absently, “I think so, I think they followed us.” Koopa brings up a series of programs on his desk-computer. “What did they look like? How were they dressed? I'm sure we can easily find them, they won't look anything like one of us.” Iggy nods again, nervously, biting his thumb, then he says: “The one is short, about 5'1, maybe 200 pounds,” he starts, Koopa writes something on a touch- screen computer on his desk, mumbling “Short, fat...,” then asks: “How was he dressed?” Iggy thinks, “He was dressed in a disco-like outfit, no tie, a leisure suit! The other guy is thin and and tall, dressed in baggy jeans and a shirt with a clown on it.” Koopa nods and enters a lot of information on the computer. “Okay, one is a coke-fiend and the other is a hipster. We'll have them in no-time.” Koopa says, calmly. “Now then, where's the girl?” He asks, Iggy sighs relieved, and says: “She's being de-fungused.” Koopa nods, and leads them out of the room, “You've done your world a great favor, today, cousins. Go rest.” They walk out of the room. As soon as the door closes and they're out of earshot, Koopa screams in frustration. “I ask for two things! TWO SIMPLE THINGS, Lena!” Lena is putting lipstick on, not really paying any attention to him. “Yeah, yeah...” She says, absently. Koopa moans angrily. “All you care about is your dumb plan.” She continues, Koopa shakes his head and wags his finger angrily. “No, NO! What I care about, IS THE FUTURE OF OUR SPECIES!” He screams in her face, she doesn't even look at him, she's now filing her nails. “Fine, whatever...” She says. Now we cut to the outside of a huge building that looks a lot like our own Manhattan's Port Authority. A hellish cab with the words “WRIGGLER CABS” pulls up, dragging along a metallic cable it's attached to from poles suspended above. The cars here are all on some kind of electrically-powered mechanism on overhanging wires. Mario and Luigi get out, Mario gets his wallet out and walks to the cabbie's window, “What's the fare?” He asks the cabbie. The cabbie looks at his clock and says “thirteen fifty-five.” Mario pulls a twenty out of his wallet and hands it to the cabbie. “The rest is a tip.” The driver smiles slightly and grabs the twenty. The Marios walk away, the cabbie takes a closer look at the money. He sighs and mumbles “What the Hell country is this from? Damned foreigners.” Back to Mario and Luigi, who walk up the stairs into the front entrance of this mighty building, a huge sign reads “MUSHROOM KINGDOM WARPZONE,” signs are everywhere for a “Bullet Bill's Bus-Line” and there are all sorts of strange shops all around. “The cop said if we're gonna get home at all, we gotta start here... this place looks a lot like Port Authority, though.” Mario says, gruffly, grabbing a nearby pamphlet from a display. Luigi looks over Mario's shoulder as he thumbs through it. “Brooklyn, Brooklyn...” He mumbles, looking through the list of places. “There's no listing for Brooklyn... or New York or a New York State, for that matter.” Mario says, disappointedly. “All they have is stuff about a Mushroom Kingdom, and a Sarasaland.” Luigi rolls his eyes, “Great, just great. Where are we, then? It's not like we could've just... oh my God.” Says Luigi to Mario, who turns and looks at him. “What? Like we could have what?” Luigi shakes his head. “Like we're in another dimension.” He says, disbelieving. Mario looks around at all the strange people. “I'm not ruling anything out, bro. Like I said, for all we know we got knocked unconscious for a hundred years and woke up in the future.” Mario says, Luigi shakes his head, angrily. “No, no no!” We are not in another dimension! There is a logical explanation for his!” He screams. Mario just replies: “I'm not so sure.”

[Redstar]

I plan to read this and give a good opinion, but paragraph-breaks would help if you don't mind adding them.

[Serum]

I plan to read this and give a good opinion, but paragraph-breaks would help if you don't mind adding them.

When it's completed I'll be uploading a PDF which has much easier to read text. Until then, I just copy and paste what I have in the treatment, so far. But you're reading, I like that.

[Redstar]

It's alright. There's a few things that stand out, and a few other things that are so-so. I like how you've essentially re-written the original movie in one of two ways: more realistic and gritty, and more video game-based fantasy. There's a hard balance to be had there, but so far you're pulling it off well.

Reading all the fan screenplays has got me thinking of sequels of my own. I already have two in mind, a trilogy of sorts that takes the established world to the end and back and wraps it up nicely. I don't think I'll actually write anything up, but the ideas are there and they're good.

[Serum]

There is more coming, soon, I assure everyone. A lot more.
Today I have a class at the community college, then I'm traveling to Centralia, but I'll get back to writing this soon.

[Redstar]

Looking forward to it, man. You have good ideas for expanding the Mario film story, which I only wish we could get to film.

[1upmushroom]

He voiced Dr. Robotnik on The Adventures of Sonic the Hedgehog (not SatAM). Strangely, his Robotnik voice is exactly what I'd imagine Bowser to sound like. Sadly, he died in 2005 or so...

Was he the one on the Sonic show that was more Sci-Fi based, he had the most evil-sounding voice! It was great, I'd definitely cast him as the voice of the 'Regressed Koopa,' at the end when Koopa becomes 'Bowser.' Too bad he died...

Do you know who else you should cast as Koopa? Miguel Ferrer. He's the guy who Shan Yu in Mulan, That guy was actually pretty good as a badguy, heres a link, now just listen, and you'll see why I said his name. Oh, and he's the big strong gray guy, with the yellow eyes.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2I-BvceYTbw

[Serum]

Screw it, I'm continuing with this. Here's the long awaited next page!

Cut to a holding cell/hotel room suite, where we see Daisy's face, she appears to be lying on a bed, her eyes open, slowly. She looks around drowsily, the camera pulls out a bit to reveal she's been redressed into a purple gown and high-heels and is wearing fine jewelry. Slowly, Daisy gets up and looks around, she stumbles a bit on the high-heels, but then gets her balance and looks in a large mirror at the corner of the room. She feels her neck, where she always wears her rock, but it's not there. The room is full of fine furniture, and there is a window at the edge of the room. She walks over to it and looks out, only for us to cut to the outside, looking in, the camera pulling back to reveal she's in a room on top of the one tower of the twisted Twin Booster Towers! The camera pulls out very far, giving us, once more, a good look at the desolation of the Mushroom Kingdom and the area surrounding it. Back to Daisy, she steps back, gasping, then sits on a fine love-seat, a large, spiky remote control sits at her side, it is apparently for the big-screen TV across from her. She picks it up and turns on the television. The first thing she sees is a strange commercial for THWOMP Boots. On TV, we see a man running through a grassy forest, and he comes to a cliff over a waterfall, he stops, clicks his heels together and jumps way across the ravine. An announcer simply says “THWOMP, just jump it. Let no obstacle stand in your way.” Then the news comes on, where we see a report explaining to keep an eye out for two strange men, who Koopa has an arrest warrant for. Daisy turns off the TV, sighing. Sitting down on the bed, she closes her eyes, and suddenly we inter-cut between Daisy and very brief shots of a bearded man in a red and white turban, sitting with his head down in a cave full of hyper-futuristic weaponry. The distant voice of a gravely sounding voice says: “Daisy...find Toad.” The shots of Toad become more frequent and finally we see him bring his head up, he's a wild-eyed man with a beard and a heavily scarred face, his eyes glow a brilliant purple for a second, then, as if he was thrown back, he violently jerks backward and gasps. We cut back to Daisy, who opens her eyes, they're also glowing the brilliant purple and then fade back to normal. Out loud, she whispers: “Toad.” With that, a door is heard unlocking and we pan over to the vault-like door at the end of the room, it opens and two Goombas walk in. Daisy freaks out! She screams at the big guys, who she apparently thinks are going to hurt her. A voice from behind the Goombas can be heard mumbling and a man makes his way through the two big guys. He's dressed in a fine suit and has a pair of thick, dorky glasses on his face. “Madam, madam, I apologize for my two, rather, incompetent friends.” He sends the Goombas out of the room. “Please allow me to introduce myself, I, am Lakitu. I'm a representative of King Koopa, and have been sent here to clear up any confusion you might currently be feeling.” He walks to the window, where there is a love-seat and a chair. Lakitu sits down in the chair, Daisy reluctantly follows and sits on the edge of the love-seat. “What's going on? What is this place?” Daisy asks. Lakitu opens a long-shaped leather book with a 'K' on it on the coffee table, a hologram of Earth pops out from it, as it's not a book with pages, but some sort of machine. “This is the world you grew up in. Earth. For you it is the big blue sphere that you have always called home.” Daisy looks at him suspiciously, and at the spinning holographic globe. Lakitu waves his hand and the globe changes from being blue, to being mostly desert, with very patches of green and even fewer patches of ocean. “This is the world you came from. Overworld. It consists of eight continents, each one with four different sectors. We are in the Mushroom Kingdom, the capital of Sarasaland, also known as, 'World Six,' aside from being the capital of Sarasaland, it's also the capital of Overworld.” Once more, Lakitu waves his hand and the globe fades away. “I still don't understand, what is this place?” Asks Daisy, and Lakitu sighs. “You're in an alternate dimension, Princess Daisy.” Says Lakitu, Daisy looks at him very strange, “Princess Daisy?” She asks, suspiciously. “Yes, you are the heir to the Toadstool Throne, you are the child of King Bowser and Queen Peach.” Daisy buries her face in her hands, “A world that's crossed over...” She trails off, remembering what Luigi said. Lakitu nods. “Admit it, your Majesty, you've always been uncomfortable in the human world and always suspected that you were somehow different.” She nods, quietly, and Lakitu waves his hand, a new hologram appears, it is the visage of Koopa. “This is King Koopa, he's very great man, Daisy. He would like to meet you.”

[Serum]

And, here's yet another page!

Slam-cut to the Mario Bros, wandering around what looks like a nightmarish Times Square, everyone pushy, shoving them around, it's like pre-Guiliani New York on crack. A man at a food kiosk puts some fried bugs on sticks on buns, the Bros pass him, he offers them some. “Hey, guys, you look like you just got here from wherever, ya must be hungry, fried Tweeter, only twenty Koopons.” Luigi shakes his head, Mario reaches for the food, he looks hungry, Luigi grabs him by the ear and yanks him away. “Mario, look. If we're going to eat in this place, we're going to have to be very, very hungry.” Mario makes a face like 'aw, shucks,' and they keep walking, when a beeping noise goes off, everyone stops for a second, looking up at the big screens on the 'Times Square,' they all change from ads for weird stuff to a portrait of Mario and Luigi, which is shockingly accurate. The booming voice of Koopa comes on an intercom, “Citizens of the Mushroom Kingdom, we have two fugitives from World Five-One in our presence, they are armed and dangerous. A reward of fifty-thousand blue coins will be given to the man who brings them to me, but they must be brought alive! Thank you for your patronage, and have a nice day.” The screens go back to normal and the people keep walking, when two sprawl-gangers walk up to Mario and Luigi. “Hey, look, it's the guys that Koopa wants!” The one says, the other adds: “Yeah, how 'bout that!” There's a pause and a few people turn and look, it gets a little quiet and there's some murmuring, when somebody yells: “GET 'EM!” The Marios try to run, but they both get conked on the head by some foreign objects and get knocked unconscious. The screen goes black and silent for a second. Then, we cut to Daisy, who is studying the holograms, Lakitu is gone, the door is sealed, again, she's been left alone. A hologram of the stars appears and a narrating voice begins: “This is the universe, it was created when the big bang occurred, trillions of years ago. While who or what caused the big bang is unknown, what is known is that shortly after the big bang, there was a second, little bang, which split the universe in two separate dimensions...” The little hologram shows an explosion, followed by one sphere of stars splitting into two. “Each universe, each dimension, is identical in shape and for every one person, place and thing in one dimension, there is an equivalent of some sort in the other. The major difference between these two dimensions, is that in Universe 1, the Earth Realm, Earth's species evolved from monkeys and apes, however, in Universe 2, the Overworld, humanity evolved from dinosaurs and fungus.” The hologram illustrates this with several entertaining visuals and then they fade to the next part of the narrative, the computer voice speaks on. “Each Universe was taken care of and kept in check by an ancient race that existed in neither dimension. This race, known as the 'Seven Stars,' consisted of twenty-three members, and their job was to keep the two dimensions unaware of each other. Only people of royalty and high political prowess were given the information that a parallel world existed, and they were strictly from Universe 2, Overworld. You, Daisy, are the last of the Seven Stars, and you are the only one left in that royal bloodline that can merge the two dimensions.” Daisy looks fascinated, she smiles and says: “Tell me about my parents.” The machine buzzes and beeps, then says “Your Mother, Queen Peach, was a well renown leader up until her death in 1974, when the crisis started. Your Father, King Bowser, was the leader until he bequeathed the throne to Koopa in 1975. He was de-evolved in 1977.” Daisy sits forward, with an upset look on her face, “De-evolved, what's that? Why was he--” The machine buzzes loudly. “I'm sorry, but that information is classified. Please ask another question.” Daisy sighs and sits back, mumbling to herself, frustrated, when the big door to the room opens and Koopa walks in, accompanied by two Goombas. Daisy stands up, and walks toward him a little. “Greetings, Princess Daisy. I am King Koopa.” He says, calmly. Walking toward her, he takes her hand and kisses it, like a gentleman. “It's an honor to have one of the Seven Stars in my presence.” Daisy giggles, obviously not knowing what Koopa's motivations are. “Oh, my, well, aren't you a gentleman? Handsome too...” She says, trailing off, flustering. Koopa bows his head in respect, smiling. “Come, you must have many questions. We shall go to the dining hall and I will answer anything you ask as best I can, will you join me?” He puts his arm out and she puts her hand on it, and they stroll out of the room. The camera pans back over to the hologram machine, which is malfunctioning...

[1upmushroom]

Well I'm really glad, because, that'd be really stupid, if your working on something, and throw away the unfinished outline and make it totaly different, when the outline isn't even done.

[Serum]

Here's the next page, also the first part of the 'Jack Thompson' scene and the precursor to the big 'De-Evolution' scene. Enjoy!

Now we cut to the Marios, who are seated on folding chairs, hands cuffed behind their backs in black and white striped prison jumpsuits. They're in some sort of interrogation room, with a table in front of them, and an empty desk chair. Mario is looking around the room, Luigi is sitting with his head down. “Well,” Luigi says, murmuring his words, “This certainly has been quite the day, hasn't it?” Mario nods and sighs. “Yeah, there's no way out of here.” Mario says, not really paying attention to Luigi. “I wonder what's going to happen now, those goons on the street beat the crap out of us, and then the next thing I know, we're here, dressed in prison jumpsuits.” Luigi says, putting his head up, looking around the room. “Don't worry, bro, we'll get out of this, that Mike guy at check-in said we'd get a lawyer.” Says Mario, who seems a lot more hopeful than Luigi at the moment. Just as Mario finishes the word 'lawyer,' a man walks in, he's a great big, fat white-haired man with a bad haircut. He's dressed in a cheap brown suit. The man walks over to the desk chair and before he sits down, he extends his hand as if to shake one of the brothers' hands, but then remembers they're cuffed. “Oh, right.” He says, then smiles and sits down. “Um-hem, boys, I'm your lawyer, Jack Thompson. How are ya? Ya look like hell.” Luigi throws his head back and sighs, desperately. “Oh God...” he says. “Are you from the city?” Mario asks, to which Jack replies: “No, I've been appointed by King Koopa, as your attorney.” Mario nods, Luigi has still got his head thrown back in despair, Mario kicks Luigi's leg, Luigi looks up and at Jack. “So what's this all about?” Luigi asks, Jack shuffles through some papers on the table and says “Well, I gotta tell ya. The only reason you two have been taken into custody is because we're to believe you have something that belongs to the King.” Thompson looks through his papers and pulls out a file, scans it quickly and continues on with his little speech. “Um, apparently you two came in through some sort of Warp Zone under the Booster Towers, right?” Mario and Luigi exchange glances, Luigi sits forward, “You mean the World Trade Center? Yeah, we were in Manhattan, some guys jumped my girlfriend, took her through this, gateway, I guess and we followed em, and then we wound up here.” Thompson looks through his papers, confused. “I don't anything about Manhattan, but um, I'm assuming it's in World 2-2, so, look, I'm gonna cut to the chase here. Which one of you has the rock? We searched your clothes but it wasn't there.” Once more, the Marios exchange confused glances, Mario looks forward, “The what?” This obviously upsets Jack, who takes off his glasses, rubs his eyes and stands up. He walks over to Mario and lunges at him, pushing his thumbs into Mario's eyes! “You know what I'm talking about!” Luigi kicks out from the chair, hands still behind his back and kicks Thompson in the balls. Thompson falls over, then he yells “Guards!” And two Goombas walk in and Mario and Luigi both freeze in fear. “Goombas, we're taking these men to the de-evolution chamber, to show them what happens to insolent whelps! Escort them there, I need to get my act together.” Thompson says, standing up, slowly, in pain. The Goombas escort Mario and Luigi out of the room, Thompson stands up, then falls over again, clutching his crotch in pain. “Damned foreigners.” He says, angrily. There's a telephone on the table, he sits down on the chair and dials a number. “Get me Lena.” He says into the phone. Cut to Koopa's office, where Lena is painting her toenails. There's a phone next to her, it starts ringing, she sets down the gloss and paint and picks it up. “Lena.” She says, to which we cut back to Jack Thompson, who is sitting in the room, rustled and upset. “Lena, it's Jack, those two guys we caught, the ones who are supposed to have the rock, they don't have it. What am I going to do? Koopa's gonna fry me if I mess up, again.” Cut back to Lena who rolls her eyes. “Jack, bubby, don't worry about it, I'll be down there to take care of it. Now, where are they being held?” She asks, cut back to Thompson who replies: “I'm taking them to Devo-1, to give them a demonstration, they're frying Wart, today, so I figured...” Cut back to Lena who replies “Excellent, I'll be down in twenty minutes, don't start without me.” She hangs up and rolls her eyes and sighs. Cut back to Jack who stands up and grabs his papers, nervously. He walks out of the room and into the hall, which is a prison cell-network, prison cells big enough for one person each are on top of each other, hundreds wide and about fifteen cells tall. He walks down the long hall, the camera following him the whole way. People in the cells are yelling incoherently, ranting and screaming for liberation...

[Prime Evil]

Heh, nice riff on "Jack 'Video Games Are Evil' Thompson" ya got going there. Though I fear the genuine article has already faded into obscurity. You don't hear very much of him lately, do you?

EDIT: Oh. I see. It's not supposed to be "Koopa-in-disguise" like 'Larry Lazard' was. The way you describe him oddly makes me think of TV's Frank from MST3K...

[Serum]

Thanks, I just thought it was a funny obscure reference. Anyway, here's the next page!

Another cut, this time to a huge dining hall, with a large, oaken table under a chandelier. Koopa is sitting at one end of the table, Daisy at the other. A man in a tuxedo walks up to the middle of the table. “What can I get for you, King Koopa?” He asks, Koopa responds “I'll have a plate of beef, and bring us some red wine.” The waiter nods, then turns to Daisy, “And for you, madame?” To which she responds: “Maybe a plate of steamed vegetables?” The waiter nods and bows his head to both of them, then walks off. Koopa looks to Daisy. “Princess Daisy, first and foremost, I must apologize for the rudimentary way you were brought here.” The waiter walks up with a bottle of red wine, he pours some in Koopa's glass and then some in Daisy's glass and leaves the bottle and walks off. “However, the situation at hand, called for desperate measures. We needed you here so badly that I had to authorize the use of brute force. I take it you learned some things from the hologram history book?” Koopa sips some of the wine from his glass. Daisy nods, “Yes, this is all very confusing, but somehow, I'm not entirely surprised. I did have a question, though.” She says, to which Koopa nods thoughtfully. “Yes, anything.” Daisy sips from her wine, then gags a little, but hides it, she puts the glass down. “What happened to my parents? The learning machine told me that my Mom died and my Dad was... de--” Koopa interrupts: “De-Evolved, yes. He was the first subject of de-evolution.” Daisy leans forward, “What is that?” Koopa sighs and responds: “De-Evolution is...” And we instantly cut to the De-Evolution chamber, where Mario and Luigi, still cuffed, are standing, backs against a wall, in a large room with a strange looking chair on a track that leads back into a chamber, Jack Thompson continues the sentence Koopa started: “...the process of reversing evolution. You may think of evolution as, an upward process? Beings evolve from primordial slime, into, intelligent life. De-Evolution, of course, works the opposite way...” A man in a prison uniform like the ones Mario and Luigi are wearing is brought in, cuffed by both his hands and feet. He's a fat man, with hair like Koopa's. They uncuff him, and then strap him into the machine. “This,” starts Thompson, “Is the great King Koopa's brother, Wart. He was recently found guilty of high treason, committing dream-based crimes with a device we now hold in our custody. He is to be de-evolved into primordial ooze. Simon, de-evolve him, now.” The camera pans over to Simon, a small man in a jumpsuit who flips a switch and turns a dial to from 'Jurassic' to 'Primordial.' He then presses a button, which causes a neck clamp on the chair to push Wart's head back. “Any last words, Wart?” Asks Jack, Wart replies: “You can de-evolve me into slime, but there's nothing keeping me from pulling myself back together again.” To which Jack nods and Simon presses another button, sending the chair flying back on the track, and up into a sort of head space in an open chamber, which seems to electrify Wart, we focus mostly on the Marios horrified reaction. Then the machine comes forward, Wart is transparent, and has a greenish hue about him, then he sinks and falls apart into slime which covers the floor. “You killed him!” Luigi exclaims, Jack shakes his head. “Nonsense, we turned him into slime mold, the stuff is practically immortal. It'll be interesting to see how it works on you... that is, unless of course, you tell me where the rock is.” Jack approaches Mario and Luigi, looming threateningly, then we suddenly cut back to Daisy, who is eating from a plate of mushrooms, her eyes open wide suddenly to a musical sting and a flash goes off and we cut to a shot of the Marios' handcuffs, which unlock and let them free! Mario and Luigi exchange glances, then push Jack Thompson into the chair, Mario holds him down while Luigi runs over to Simon, decks him in the face, knocking him out cold, flips a few switches and then Jack is locked into the chair! Mario starts pushing the chair on the track, all the while Jack's screaming “NO! NO!” Luigi cranks the dial from 'Primordial' to 'Pre-Primordial,' the chair goes flying back and Jack Thompson is evaporated into a fine mist! Mario and Luigi high five, then Simon manages to get up and press a button for an alarm, which sounds and soon lights are blaring! “What do we do?!” Luigi yells, Mario points off screen and they run down a hallway, a sign above the arch reads 'LOADING BAY.' They run down the hall, and through a pair of large doors that lead out into a garage, full of big trucks that seem to be for transporting prisoners. “Come on, let's hijack a car and get the hell out of here!” They hop in a truck, Luigi at the wheel, and hot-wire it, Mario yells: “LET'S HIT THE BRICKS!”

[Prime Evil]

They hot-wire a truck? Don't tell me you're getting rid of the static-electricity cars!

[Serum]

They hot-wire a truck? Don't tell me you're getting rid of the static-electricity cars!

No, I intend for it to be on a grid.

[Prime Evil]

They hot-wire a truck? Don't tell me you're getting rid of the static-electricity cars!

No, I intend for it to be on a grid.

*whew* Good, 'cause that's one of Dinohattan's many trademarks.

[Serum]

Finally! Here's what happens next, for all of you who are still reading.

Cut back to Daisy and Koopa, Koopa is about to explain the de-evolution process. “Well, it's...” Suddenly, the butler runs in the room, panicked. “King Koopa, King Koopa! We have a situation in DEVO-1!” Koopa looks up, sighing, annoyed. “Can't it wait?” Suddenly, a klaxon starts blaring, Koopa rolls his eyes and throws his napkin down. He stands up and looks at Daisy, bowing his head in a Japanese-style apologetic stance. “Princess, you'll have to forgive me, but it seems there's a crisis that my men haven't been able to properly handle. If you wish to finish your meal, you'll be provided with entertainment in the adjacent room whenever you're done, and I'll be back as soon as I can to answer all of your questions.” Daisy nods, “Okay, do what you gotta do.” She says, lightly and Koopa bows his head again and then briskly walks out of the room, silently cursing under his breath. Cut to a new room, full of television screens on top of each other, security-style. There are a few policemen sitting and frantically working on things, from yelling into communications devices, to typing away on keyboards to screaming at each other. Koopa bursts in the room, furious. “Just what the HELL is going on that I can't have ONE, ONE NICE DINNER--” He suddenly looks up at the screens and sees a loop of Mario and Luigi hopping into the prison-transport truck from a few minutes ago. “King Koopa, thank God, two prisoners somehow broke out of their cuffs and vaporized Thompson. They're out on the grid, now, we have six units pursuing them.” Koopa recognizes Mario and Luigi from Iggy and Spike's description, “Shit. It's them. What number was that truck, where are they headed?” Koopa asks, to which a cop responds “Transport 23, we think they're headed for the tunnel.” The cop says, then Koopa takes off his suit coat and sits down at a table next to an open-communications microphone. He punches in some numbers on a keypad and the next thing we see are various shots over the city, where strategically placed speakers spout his live orders. “Attention citizens of Mushroom Kingdom, this is King Koopa. It seems we have a minor situation on hand, and I want every cop, bounty hunter and thrill seeker within a ten mile radius of the Koopahari Tunnel to pursue stolen transport vehicle number 23 and bring me the hijackers alive. The reward is ten thousand coins!” At this, dangerous looking people in bars, back-alleys and on the nightmarish Times Square look up and then head for their cars, loading guns with Bullet-Bills, putting on armor, starting up their vehicles. We cut to Mario and Luigi, who are weaving through traffic at top speed, screaming loudly and victoriously even as the cops chase after them. They're headed for a large tunnel that says “KOOPAHARI TUNNEL,” when suddenly, several angry-looking 'road-warrior' style cars approach them and start ramming them from every side. They enter the tunnel and are illuminated by the trance of passing lights. “Damn it, I can't see where I'm going!” Luigi yells, Mario looks around nervously and puts on a seatbelt.

A few shots of the drivers of the other vehicles, they're all very 'road warrior' types, gritty, cyberpunk crazies. In one of the cars, a sort of dune buggy, there are three guys, all red hooded cloaks and white, faceless masks with black, bug eyes. One of them pulls out a large gun with the word “FRY GUY” written on the side. Luigi adjusts the side mirror and sees the cloaked Fry Guy pointing this big gun at them, he screams and swerves suddenly to the side. The Fry Guy opens fire, a long trail of fire comes flowing out of the gun, igniting part of the tunnel in flames. The rear bumper of the Marios' truck is now scorched. Suddenly, a mechanical voice goes off on the onboard computer of their truck. “Warning, leaving power grid, navigations now powering down...” And the computer goes black, a blue screen appears that reads SWITCHING TO FOSSIL FUEL SYSTEM. One of the cars, a souped up '58 Plymouth Fury with a battering ram on its front bumper is tailgating their truck, when all of a sudden, a blast of BLUE NITROUS GAS blasts out of the two tailpipes of the truck and the Marios go flying forward at a much faster rate than the other guys. A few shots of the others, they all shift gears in their cars and flip switches, some buckle their seat belts. They blast off quickly, too, and we see the Marios headed for the light at the end of the tunnel, which is blocked off by a few boards and a roadblock. Suddenly, we cut to blue sky, a large, grimy green pipe that is the outside of the tunnel and a huge desert wasteland. It's all quiet for a second, when all of a sudden, the Marios come blasting out through the roadblock and begin high-tailing it across the desert. The crazies follow after...

...more to come!

[Serum]

Yet another part of the script...

The Marios drive off into the desert, the crazies follow and suddenly, we cut to Koopa, who is walking down a long hallway, accompanied by two Goombas. He's now in a large garage, lights are flashing and alarms are blaring. Suddenly, he crawls into the back of what appears to be a limousine, he sits back and someone closes the door. He leans forward and says “Take me to the desert, let's see the action first-hand.” A man in a black turban and sunglasses at the driver's seat nods. Another cut, this time to outside of a loading bay door at the base of the nightmare twin towers, the huge garage door opens up and a CADDILAC LIMO ON MONSTER TRUCK WHEELS comes flying out, it drives off into the desert. Back inside the cab, we see Koopa, who is trying to keep himself stable as he pours himself a cup of some sort of alcoholic beverage, which keeps sloshing around as the limo's shocks fail. Koopa rolls his eyes and takes a swig, but they hit a bump and it splashes in his face. In anger he tosses the glass down, breaking it. Leaning forward, he flips on a computer, enters some sort of command and on the limo's roof, a loudspeaker gives out feedback and then, as the limo approaches the rear end of the men chasing the Marios, Koopa yells into a mic: “I WANT THEM ALIVE, THEY'RE NO GOOD TO ME, DEAD!” Back in the truck with Mario and Luigi, we see they're driving towards the ruined “Statue of Liberty,” when all of a sudden, there are men in white and red turbans, sitting in pits in the dune, watching the Marios being chased down. They're readying rocket launchers, loading them with huge Bullet Bills. The Marios go flying over a sand dune and their truck lands on its side, skidding down into a hole on the other side of the statue's head. Then the turbaned men get up, and launch an all-out attack! We see through sniper-scopes, as they aim their big guns at the the crazies. Then, a tall man in a red and white turban, wild-eyes and crazed steps up and points and yells “ATTACK!” And they let loose the gunfire, the Bullet Bills fly through the sky like rockets, smashing into the crazies vehicles, who have no chance of defense, as they're taken totally by surprise. Then, the remaining crazies skid out of control, and turn around, heading home. The only vehicle remaining is Koopa's monster limo, it comes to a stop about fifty yards from the wild-eyed man. Koopa pushes himself out of the sunroof of the limo and gets on a bullhorn. “Toad! You are harboring two fugitives that belong in my custody! Release them to me.” Toad, the wild eyed man, pulls out a microphone and speaks into it, his voice comes out of various speakers placed on the statue's head spikes. “Get back, Koopa! You're breaking our terms of agreement. If you so much as come one more inch towards me, so help me God, I'll have you shot!” Koopa and Toad have come to a standoff, they stare at each other from across the desert. Koopa sighs and shakes his head, “There's nothing we can do,” he says to the driver and crawls back into the limo. “Let's go back to Booster and figure something out.” The driver nods and the limo turns around and heads back towards the city. Toad grins and puts the microphone away and watches Koopa's limo drive away. He then walks towards the pit that the Marios fell in, he makes a few signals with his hands and some of his men follow him. Toad peers down into the pit, where Mario and Luigi are slowly crawling out from the wreckage of their truck. “Now that's driving!” Luigi yells, victoriously, Mario shakes his head and shudders, then looks up to see Toad and his men looking down at them. “Oh, God. What now?” Mario says, Toad hops down into the pit and walks up to the brothers. “Well, well, what have we here? Some brothers from another dimension.” Luigi looks up at the statue head. “Who are you?” He asks, Toad shakes his head and walks up to Luigi and shakes his hand. “No, the appropriate question is 'Where am I,' and I think you've been wondering that this whole time, haven't you?” Toad says, and shakes Mario's hand. Mario looks brushes himself off and rolls his eyes and looks up at the statue. “What the hell...?” Toad nods, “Come with me, I'll explain everything.” He says, putting his hand on Mario's shoulder, leading him and Luigi into a door at the side of the head of the statue. We cut back to Daisy, who is sitting at a window, looking out at the desert. Lena walks in, filing her nails. “You must be Daisy.” Daisy sits up and spins around. “Who are you?” She asks, Lena sighs and looks out the window. “Koopa's a damned liar. I'm surprised you haven't seen it. He hasn't told you the whole truth, let me fill you in...” Lena says.

...enjoy.

[Serum]

Here's a crucial part of the story...

Now we cut to a woman in a red dress, about thirty three years old, sitting in a large holding cell with several other women. She looks mad as a hornet, this is PAULINE. Two Goombas are guarding the only exit out of the room. Pauline stands up and starts pacing. “I don't believe this shit, I'm on my way to a date with Mario and then out of nowhere, these jackasses bag me and the next thing I know I'm in this godforsaken place.” One of the other girls looks up, she's smoking a cigarette. “Yeah, I hear ya, Pauline. But that Jack Thompson guy said we'd be let go, soon.” Pauline shakes her head and punches the wall, causing a hairline crack in it. “I don't care what some lawyer said! We're not getting out of here any time soon! Do you really believe what a lawyer says? That's why he's called a lawyer! He's paid to lie!” She's steaming mad. The doors open up and the Goombas salute as Lena and Daisy walk in, Pauline looks at Daisy in disbelief. “Hey, aren't you Luigi's girlfriend? Petunia, was it?” Pauline asks, annoyed. “Daisy, it's Daisy.” She says, Lena dismisses the two Goombas, who walk out of the room. “Alright, you're all confused, I know.” Lena begins, and walks over to a computer console and activates it. Holograms appear, illustrating Lena's story. “Daisy, as you already know, this is a dimension alternate to your own, and that you're heir to the Toadstoolian throne.” Lena begins, Daisy nods, the other girls exchange confused looks. “What you don't know is that because of your heritage, your bloodline, if you will, you are capable of merging this dimension with the one you live in.” The hologram shows two earths, one mostly blue, our world, and one mostly desert, their world, coming together and forming a new planet. “This is what Koopa wants.” Daisy shakes her head. “Why? Why does he want to merge the dimensions?” She asks, confused, Lena brings up a new hologram, showing a mostly green planet, with several huge blue lakes, it fades to desert. “Several years ago, Overworld, our planet, became subject to a mysterious ecological crisis that is slowly causing the planet to die. As you can see, most of it is desert, already. When your father was still in power, when he was still King, Koopa was one of his most trusted advisers. He suggested to King Bowser, your father, that we merge the dimensions, your world being healthy and full of vibrancy would breath life back into our own. Unfortunately, this would cause a population overload, and would result in our species having to exterminate humanity, in order to continue living. Your father rejected this idea, stating it was not only immoral, but due to the fact that the dimensions were already once one, many eons ago, and split due to unknown reasons, the merging of worlds might upset the balance of space and time and in effect destroy the entire universe. And because you are the last of your bloodline, descended from the Power Stars, you are the last that can merge the worlds.” The hologram shows all sorts of illustrations lighting up the room. “So, he wants me to merge the dimensions, but how would I do that? I don't know how.” Lena pulls the rock that Daisy wears around her neck from her pocket. “With this,” she says. Daisy looks amazed, “Where did you get that?” She asks, confused. “A few hours ago I was monitoring sector 23 and I saw two guys that looked very out of place getting mugged by an old woman. Turns out they're the guys Koopa's been going on a wild goose hunt for, thinking they have this-- this is a piece of the crystal that floats in between worlds, you remember, I'm sure, the chamber you came through?” A flash of the great room with the floating crystal in it, Daisy nods. “If anyone else but you places this crystal in the chipped spot on the massive rock in between worlds, they'll die and the dimensions will not merge. But if you, a descendent of the race who created the rock does so, it would bring the two dimensions back together as one.” Daisy sighs, shaking her head. She starts, “What should we do? I mean, we could destroy it, then there would be no hope of merging--” But Lena cuts her off. “If you don't merge the dimensions, then Koopa has a backup plan, called 'Project Boo.' It would be a complete genocide of the race you know and love, the humans, and then, he would have everyone in this world move over to yours, and rule over a green, lush world full of abundant resources.” There's a moment of silence, Daisy is taking all of this in, very thoughtfully. “Why are you telling me this? Don't you work for him?” Daisy asks, Lena nods. “I do, but I hate his guts and I want to see him fail.” Pauline looks up, throws a cigarette on the ground and stomps it out. “That's good enough reason for me. What should we do about this?”

...more of the outline to come.

[Serum]

Here's another page of the treatment. I don't mean to toot my own horn or anything, but this is probably some of the best dialogue I've ever written in this scene, between Mario and Luigi, when Mario gives Luigi the pep talk, and Luigi is reluctant and Mario anoints themselves as the "SUPER" Mario Brothers. Also, this scene explains (if you've paid attention to Daisy's profile) how the Marios get their overalls/clothes/tools back, and is about to introduce a major new element in the technology in this world. We also establish Koopa's desire to push his own evolution forward in this scene and what might lead to further lapses in his mental stability and his own metaphysical structure slowly de-evolving. What will happen next? Stay tuned, much more to come... I hope you guys are reading this, I'm loving writing this.

Cut back to Toad, who is sitting at a table with Mario and Luigi, over a cup of tea. “And that's the whole story, basically the only way I knew about you guys was through the seer stones and my oracle team. We've been keeping tabs on Booster Plaza since the explosion in February.” He snags the collar of his prison jumpsuit. “So what you're saying is we've got to stop Koopa?” He asks. “Yes, if he succeeds, the very fabric of space and time will become unstable, possibly destroying the entire universe. Granted the effects may be limited to our own galaxy...” Toad says and sips his tea. “If I had my tools, and could get out of these freaking clothes and into my gear, I think we might be able to take on that dick.” Mario punches his hands together, cut to Daisy, who is walking down a hallway with the missing Brooklyn girls and Lena, her eyes light up for a second and then cut back to Mario and Luigi with Toad, where there's a flash and a tote bag falls from thin air, and two tool belts. “What the hell?” Luigi walks over to it and picks up his tool belt, then opens the bag, he pulls out his overalls and green t-shirt and hat, and his boots. “Hey, Mario! It's our stuff!” Mario spins around and looks at it suspiciously. “Toad, how'd you get our clothes and our stuff?” He asks, but Toad shakes his head in amazement, shrugging. “Whatever, I'm not going to shoot a gift horse in the mouth,” Mario starts, then grabs his clothes and tools. “Come on Luigi, we have a princess to save.” Montage of a suit-up, Mario and Luigi putting on their tool belts and hats, etc. Mario checks his pocket and pulls out a thin pack of cigars, he nods approvingly and puts them back in. Luigi cracks his knuckles. “How are you feeling, bro?” Mario asks, adjusting his tool belt. “Scared. We're not superheroes, Mario. We're just the Mario Brothers.” Luigi says, Toad is unloading boxes of weapons in the background, he looks up when Mario says “No,” and then puts his hands on Luigi's shoulders, facing him triumphantly. “We're the SUPER Mario Brothers.” Mario says, confidently. “You have someone who loves you, who's probably very afraid right now, sitting scared somewhere in that city. Are you going to throw that all away, are you going to say 'I, Luigi Mario, gave up and let the universe crumble because I let myself go quietly into the night?' Or are you and I going to ride into that godforsaken town like horsemen charging the gates of Hell and take the power back?” They stare at each other for a moment. Luigi nods, wearily but approvingly. “Now, let's do what we need to do, and then go home and laugh about it, later.” Luigi looks at Mario, then out the window at the city skyline in the fading daylight. “What if we can't do it, Mario? What if we fail, what if it's impossible?” Luigi says, sadly, Toad is laying out all sorts of weapon goodies on a table, half-listening to the brothers, when Mario sighs, shaking his head with a confident smile on his face and says “Nothing's impossible, Luigi. Improbable, unlikely, but never impossible. You just gotta believe.” Toad picks up a pair of fingerless gloves, bound together by a weak plastic wire, he tosses Mario a pair, and then tosses Luigi a pair. “I hate to interrupt all the cool pep-talk, but I've gotta show you some stuff before we can storm the city.” Mario looks at the gloves. “What are these?” He asks, Toad walks out the door. “Follow me, I'll show you, open them up and put them on and come on out.” We cut to Koopa, who is getting out of the limo in the garage, he's mad as a hornet. “God damn it! I must be getting senile in my old age... wait. That's it.” A butler looks at him curiously. “What's it, sir?” Koopa walks past him. “Get me to Devo 1.” He says, we cut to the de-evolution chamber, where a janitor is cleaning up the remains of Jack Thompson and Wart. Beedleman, a short, nerdy scientist with thick glasses walks up to Koopa, who sits himself down in the chair on the track to the machine. “Are you sure you want to do this, sir? We've never attempted forward evolution, before.” Beedleman says, but Koopa won't hear any of it. “Beedleman, I'm the descendent of the Tyrannosaurus Rex, the Lizard King. If this works, I'll be more powerful than any warrior on any battlefield in history. If this works, I will be a god.” Beedleman sighs. “Strap him in.” He says, and a few workers in jumpsuits strap Koopa into the chair, then brace his neck in the lock on the chair. “Let's do this,” Beedleman looks at the control panel and changes the setting from Primordial,” all the way to “Advanced,” then selects an option for 'Level 4” and flips the appropriate switches, sending Koopa back into the machine. Lights flash and when the chair comes forward, Koopa's eyes open, they're catlike, glowing.

Remember, if you have any questions, comments or criticisms, tell me! I'm all ears, so to speak. More pages coming on the way...

[Serum]

Yet another exciting page, I'm on a roll!

Then we cut back to the outside of the statue, where Mario and Luigi are on some sort of shooting range out back with Toad, who is putting on his own pair of the fingerless gloves. His are white, and have a needle-point of a rose on fire stitched into them. He gets them on and cracks his knuckles and then points at a wrecked tractor trailer in the distance. “See that truck?” He asks the brothers, who have put on their gloves. They nod. “Watch this.” He points his hand, palm outward, fingers spread at the truck which is maybe sixty yards away in the dim sunlight, then kinetic energy forms around his hand and turns into a ball of fire which all in a split second fires out into the desert and slams into the truck, exploding it! Mario and Luigi exchange surprised glances. “For the next thirty-six hours, we're going to train with this and other technology that will help you guys infiltrate Booster Plaza and get Princess Daisy back and hopefully kill Koopa while we're at it.” Luigi steps forward. “Thirty six hours?! Koopa could have the rock by then! Hell, he might have the rock, now!” Luigi complains. Toad shakes his head. “Your coming was foretold in the ancient books, it is written that there would come a day where our worlds would intertwine in turmoil and that two great warriors from your side would come through and vanquish a great devil. Look, I don't necessarily believe all that stuff, but I gotta admit that it is odd that it's all kind of adding up, here and now. So let's try not to screw around.” Now we get a montage of the Marios training over the course of thirty-six hours, throwing fireballs from the fingerless gloves, firing guns packed with Bullet-Bills and jumping around with ease in the THWOMP boots. Finally, we see them mastering these skills and Toad nodding in approval. Cut to Koopa, who is sitting in his office, his skin is scaly and his eyes are catlike and he seems to be stronger than before, he's examining his own hands, like they were something new. Lena walks in. “Having fun, Koop?” She asks, drolly. “I feel so... bright.” Koopa says, his voice sounds calm, smooth, that of a sociopath. “I've been sitting here for the last day, wondering what to do about those two idiots who Toad is keeping from me. They have the rock...” Lena looks up for a second, suspiciously, then grins while Koopa has his back turned. “I've never in all my life felt so powerful. I'm starting to think we don't even need Daisy to proceed. I think it's time to test Project BOO.” Lena spins around, slightly startled. “You're not going ahead with it, are you?” She asks, anxiously. “No, not quite yet. I want to test it in an isolated environment and see how well it works.” Lena sighs, relieved, Koopa doesn't seem to notice. “Have some men go down to the Donut Building, I want it sealed off. Put some Goombas inside and we'll monitor how long they last against Project BOO.” Lena nods, “I'll relay the order.” She storms out of the room, silently cursing to herself. Koopa is too wrapped up in his own self-fascination that he doesn't notice her acting strangely. We cut back to Mario and Luigi, who are having an argument. “Mario, I don't care how much more training he wants to give us! We have to strike now! We have to get Daisy back, now!” Luigi is raising his voice in anger, Mario is trying to calm him down. “Luigi, bro, we need to trust Toad. I know you care about her, but we need to be patient!” Luigi knocks over a pile of old magazines, which crumble to dust. “I'm sick of this, the only reason you're being so brave and bold is because Pauline is safe at home, watching Oprah!” Luigi yells, this gets under Mario's skin so bad that he slugs Luigi across the mouth, but immediately regrets doing it, “Bro,” he starts, “Wee-Gee, I'm so sorry, I didn't mean to hurt you, bro...” Luigi stands up and punches Mario in the gut, Mario falls to the floor. “Don't call me that, Mario! Because as of this moment, we're not brothers anymore. Don't ever talk to me again. I'm going to that castle and saving my princess.” Luigi storms off, Toad, who has been watching the whole thing, walks in and helps Mario up. “We have to stop him, he's going to get himself killed.” Mario says, hoarsely. Toad shakes his head. “No, it's prophesied. Things will work themselves out-- I know that sounds crazy, but they will. For now, we need to do one more thing...” Mario nods, cut to Luigi, who storms out into a lot full of all-terrain vehicles, he hops in one, one of Toad's men tries to stop him but Luigi points his hand at him, threatening him with a fireball. Luigi then starts the ATV and begins driving towards the city, some heavy rock music plays, and we get a good look at Luigi's face, his eyes are full of both confidence and fear, but the fear is outweighing anything positive...

More to come...

[Phlibbit]

Well, I finally had enough time to read through the last couple of updates. I really, really like where the story is going. It's extremely true to the SMB movie, but almost flawlessly adding in more realized game elements, as well as some of the things we wish the actual film explored. Keep it up, I wanna see the third act!

[Prime Evil]

Can we find Merritt a time machine and send him back to 1993 so he can deposit this thing into the studio's hands?

[1upmushroom]

Can we find Merritt a time machine and send him back to 1993 so he can deposit this thing into the studio's hands?

It probably wouldn't matter. They'd probably just ditch it like they did the 91 draft.

[Prime Evil]

Can we find Merritt a time machine and send him back to 1993 so he can deposit this thing into the studio's hands?

It probably wouldn't matter. They'd probably just ditch it like they did the 91 draft.

'Tis funny you should say that, Merrit. Back when George Pal was making The War of the Worlds, he gave the completed script book to the head of Paramount, who, not being a fan of SF, promptly chucked it into the wastebasket. (This is all according to extra features on TWotW-53's DVD release.) Apparently, George Pal went absolutely bonkers on the guy and grabbed him by the lapels! Shows you just how much he wanted it to get made...you *could* try a similar approach.

[Serum]

Well, I haven't updated this in awhile, but I do intend to write more. Unfortunately I lost my master file and will have to work off what I posted here, but that's okay. Thankfully almost everything that was in the master file is on this thread. But yeah, when I get around to it, more to come.